Elevator Pitch No. 2
Pitch:
Reflection on feedback: Looking back on my last pitch, the best feedback I got was to make my pitch longer and to use more of my time to explain my platform. Many people commented that my pitch was easy to understand and cohesive, but that I should use my time more wisely to explain my platform better.
What I changed: Based on my feedback, I first made pitch longer. I made my hook more detailed, and then went into more detail on my product. When talking about my product I did not just explain the product, but I also went into detail on why my product in particular was unique and why it stood out among the competition. Additionally, I discussed the audience this would benefit and the various features my product has that make it a useful tool for all students. Overall, I tried to use the constructive feedback I received on my last post to better my elevator pitch the second time.
Hey Shaina,
ReplyDeleteI thought this elevator pitch was amazing! i have no criticism or critiques for it! You started by talked about an issue and how it effects us by talking about a very relatable story and told us how you have an idea so it never happens again. You then went into large details about the idea. Supper effective pitch! Great job!:)
Great work on your second elevator pitch, you can really tell that you took in the criticism of your peers and I saw a lot of progress from your first elevator pitch. I like that you dress up for your pitches, this really shows professionalism and how serious you take these assignments. I also really enjoy your product idea.
ReplyDeleteHi Shaina,
ReplyDeleteI feel like you definitely accomplished your goals in explaining your platform with still maintaining a cohesive and easy-to-understand pitch. This was very well done from start to finish. If I was an employer you were pitching this to, you'd be hired. Great job and thank you for sharing!
Hey Shaina,
ReplyDeleteI understand more now what problem you aim on fixing in regards to organization. Your platform is a lot more easy to understand from an audience perspective. I found it to be very cohesive, and everything that you said tied in together very well. I don't have any critiques, you covered everything you needed to. Great job and thank you for sharing the video!